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Description of the track:
I wrote this song, “Ball And Chain” about a year ago. It’s part of a new project/band called Bon Devane. It’s one among four other songs on our first EP, which was recorded and mixed exclusively in my 29 square metre apartment, even the drums! I strove for an acoustic-oriented singer/songwriter feel, sort of like Jack Johnson, for this song.
The lyrical meaning of the song is basically about breaking free from boring routines, and in my case day-time job, which is easily understood by the pretty obvious metaphor hook.
The drums were overdubbed individually (snare, hi-hat and cymbals) upon samples from Superior Drummer 2.0, which I had already programmed in the pre-production. Miraculously no neighbors got annoyed so we could continue with the rest of the recording.
Gear used was iMac, Logic Pro 9, Apogee Quartet, UA-LA610 channel strip, a few mics and auralex absorption walls. I’m really content with the sound, and it’s almost spot on to where I was heading in my mind. Would love some critique on this, as I want to get better!!
Thanks a bunch! /Rasmus
Artist’s website: bondevane.com
Lyrics:
you couldn’t hear the whistle blow
you saw the train and watch it go
easy there’ll be more to come
don’t you worry not all is gone
but you’ve become a factory
sad but true actually
polluting poison in the air right now
messing up the atmosphere
CHORUS-1
Ball and chain you’re stuck with ball and chain
standing in the same spot everyday
Ball and chain your stuck with ball and chain
clouds are getting heavier, lets cut it off and lets go away
VERSE-2
quicksand is holding you down
how long will it take till you´ll drown?
grab a hand if you want to
you’ve got bigger dreams than this, don’t ya?
CHORUS-2
Ball and chain you’re stuck with ball and chain
standing in the same spot everyday
Ball and chain your stuck with ball and chain
clouds are getting heavier, lets cut it off and lets go away
CHORUS-3
Ball and chain you’re stuck with ball and chain
standing in the same spot everyday
Ball and chain your stuck with ball and chain
clouds are getting heavier, lets cut it off and lets go away
Ball and ball and chain
Ball and ball and chain, lets cut it off and lets go away
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