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Description of the track:
To record this track I used two large diaphragm condensers as a stereo pair to record the acoustic guitar. Everything in this track is on the guitar (including the beat heard in the chorus).
I also had a good friend of mine from the Manchester based band ‘House of three Hands’ lay down vocal take. I recorded and mixed in Logic Pro 9. The music and lyrics are written by myself.
Lyrics:
As I reach,
Towards your hand I see a,
Flash of light that blinds my,
Honest side,
No two ways that my,
Values are colder,
To throw you aside,
For my own sacrifice,
Chorus:
You gave me a reason that,
You could not explain,
Too late were the stories that,
You could not be tamed,
Verse 2:
In hindsight,
All I needed was a,
Vision of you,
From the past to the truth,
From the past to the truth,
The poof to me that you were nothing of loss,
Was the lack of the doubt over the moral cost,
The feeling inside when there’s nothing to lose,
When there’s nothing to lose.
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